Less mumbling, dead air, and banging around. More research and planning out what you are going say and when. You could have filled the dead air with comparisons to the other films. For instance, the tank in this film seems to have inspired the tank in the movie "Mary Shelly's Frankenstein". Keep it up though.
Thanks for the comment. my mic's not very good and I kinda just did this commentary without any kind of planning. well I guess you could tell. Thanks anyways!Gojira84
Oh and thanks for listening to it! Watch for more to come!Gojria84
"Oh and thanks for listening to it! Watch for more to come!"Will do. I love the fact that you did a commentary for such an old movie.
I just realized that I cut off the first part of my original post. I did compliment you for doing some old stuff before I critiqued it. Sorry about that.
Thats fine, Happy to hear your feedback. I think I might do some other kind of silent shorts later on just more prepared.Gojira84
"I think I might do some other kind of silent shorts later on just more prepared."Cool. If you do any longer silents, Nosferatu would be nice. The commentary on the DVD I have is a bit boring.